From what I understand you have clearly pointed out that whole CAS
concept is based on cost efficiency. However I see relatively little
example as why this is such. You mention that a direct hit will destroy
the drugs and render the harness useless. I'm left to believe that it
has little to no armor, may be made of inferior materials, and does not
administer drugs well to users.
I'd like to see more about the actual
device itself. Give it a few more setbacks (just a small handful) and
give them more in depth detail. Tell us what it is made of and how it
works. Are soldiers afraid to use it due to its battlefield reputation?
Is there a more expensive version that has major differences? You have a
wonderful way of describing things, this part just needs background.
As for the drugs you have written up, they happen to be rather generic.
They rely on basic rpg stats which they take their names after. I like
how they each have setbacks with slight explanations. That explains why
they are cheap and easily made.
You have put four good submission ideas into one condensed form. As a result they each
lack an adequate amount of detail. You've included the cheap CAS object
itself, the drugs it uses, the setbacks of drugs, and the history behind
the drugs and CAS. My advice is to make three separate submissions out
of the one.
Aside from the submission I'm noticing that you have started off the
first three paragraphs and precursor with the word "the". It can become
fairly repetitive or irksome to a reader when every line or paragraph
begins with the same word. Don't fear though, that is a common problem
and the word you are using is one of the most overused words. Try
rotating out words or rearranging the sentences when you see this