Here's another example of a "firstly, secondly, finally" paragraph that I wrote with my students:
Three main factors are affecting health in modern societies. One problem is the lack of awareness among many people of the negative consequences of an unhealthy diet. This is made worse by the prevalence of fast food and processed food, which are full of fat, salt and sugar. Another key factor is the changing trend in lifestyles. For example, children’s hobbies now involve much less outdoor activity, and adults are less active as jobs have shifted towards sedentary office work instead of manual labour. In addition to this, time-saving technologies, such as cars, elevators, dishwashers and washing machines, have made people lazier.
Analyse the paragraph by answering the following questions.
- What is the main topic of the paragraph?
- Which phrases are used instead of "firstly, secondly, finally"?
- What examples of 'band 7-9' vocabulary can you find?