Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Unquotable:Quotes in AAAAA! (quick)
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|Humour:||2||AAAA AAA AAAA AA AAAA! AAA AA AAAA AAAAA AA AA AAAAA??!?|
|Concept:||3||A.A, AAA AAA AAAA AAAA AAAAAA...|
|Prose and formatting:||2||AAAA AAAAA?|
|Images:||5||AAA AAAA AAAA AAA AAAAAA AA AA - AAAAA, A AAAA - AAA.|
|Miscellaneous:||5||AAA AAAAA AA AAAAAAAAA AAAA AAAA, AA AAA AAAA AAAAAAAA AAAAAA AAAAA.|
|Reviewer:||--NonchalantCaterpillar 00:09, November 19, 2010 (UTC)|
- What are you actually expecting from this? You realise there's very little, if anything, for a reviewer to say here. --Black Flamingo 11:22, November 20, 2010 (UTC)
- Perhaps I shall have to spell it out in words, then. And I am restoring the Caterpillar's review above, both because I might want to reference it and also because, let's face it, the guy has got a point. -- 20101122 - 07:26 (UTC)
|Concept:||2||I hate to say it, but there is only so much you can actually do with AAAAAAA - once the initial insanity factor wears off, effectively the bulk of the joke, all it is is a bunch of A's. And as it is an old joke, you're in an even worse position than normal with something unintelligible like this - it has been literally done to death already. You are recycling memes so to speak, and thus need to do something else to make it stand out, but what can you do when all it is is a bunch of A's?
Thus what the caterpillar said - AAA AAA AAAA AAAA AAAAAA... and thus why there really isn't that much to say in plain words, either.
|Humour:||4||Mind, that's not to say that nothing can be done, just that you're in a bad position from the get-go and won't be able to take it very far. Might be able to make for a cute little article if you really work with it, but it will doubtfully ever make for a feature.
This is an Unquotable, however, and thus you are awarded a fair amount of leeway from the usual standard of all A's everywhere - the introductory section could be your key to making this truly funny. As it is, however, you just say that AAAAA is profound and speaks about many things - far from sufficient to be overly funny, let alone keep an article afloat. You say it is profound - how is it profound? You have space for a couple of paragraphs here, so play it out into something ridiculous that will shade how the reader then goes on to read the quotes themselves. And about many things? Why about many things?
You don't have that much of a variety of things listed - Uncyclopedia, sex, the article itself, nothing, something. You could play of randomness, calling quotes on completely random topics that might in of themselves be funny that they are all listed together. You could have the topics be a series of things that enact out a story - say, AAAAA on pogosticks, then windows, then falling, then trampolines, then... well, some sequence, at any rate. Or you could play out a theme and then leave out something, thus seeming suspicious about it. But do something; every word is an opportunity to make a funny or build upon something else, so take the opportunity.
And consider everything, at every step - even the number of quotes in a section can imply stuff. Why so many quotes on sex, for instance? It's curious, but if you throw in some links that might explain why, it could become funny. It could also not, but it's worth considering each thing as you come to it.
|Prose and formatting:||2||Since most of this ain't even words, formatting is extra important. Links, sections, lengths, fonts... you could even use font-variant:small-caps to have uppercase and lowercase all display as As, but clearly distinguishably... consider the words and the punctuation, too, and to what the quotes are - one section could even have a single quote, one could have twenty - use them to emphasise importance, perhaps.
It is also slightly disconcerting the number of typos you happen to have in the parts that do contain works, however. It might behoove you to activate a spellchecker in the future. Not only will it help you catch spelling errors, but you may even improve your spelling in general. Or not. But still.
|Images:||5||Well, it's an image. It's alright, I suppose, but surely you could find a funnier one, and/or use a more... ah, profound caption? If that's to be your joke, play upon it. Don't say it has facebook, give a demonstration of how profound it can be in pictures... after all, the pictures in the original are a large part of what makes it so funny. Even more than the ridiculousness of the text, the complete ludicrousness of the images just take it to the next level.|
|Miscellaneous:||4||Meh. A AAAA, AA'A AAAAAA AA AA AAAAAA AAAA AAAA, AAA AAAAA AA AAA AAAAA AAAAAA? AA'A AAA AAAA AA AAA AAAAA'A AAAA AAAA AAAAAA...|
|Final Score:||17||So, effectively, the main problem here is what it is. Past that, though, you'll have a fair bit of work (and some thinking, at that) to do before this really becomes worth keeping around.
Let's face it - reusing old in-jokes really tends not to work so well. Or as the caterpillar aptly put it, AAAA.
|Reviewer:||-- 20101122 - 07:26 (UTC)|