|Reviews for Venture Time|
| Galvantula866 chapter 1 . 10/8/2012
OK, this is quite poor. From Triana acting OoC, to the lack of proper grammar, it just feels painfully unfinished.
I felt lost reading this and when a reader feels lost, that's a bad sign. Take this from a fellow VB X Over writer: Don't be afraid to do research on both shows, so your readers can follow along and not feel like there's things missing, and believe me, this could use some info in it. Not a ton of stuff, mind you, but try and make sure people can tell who's who.
| otherrealmwriter chapter 1 . 9/13/2012
This is an okay start. Needs more detail like how they are feeling scenery and such. Now there is too much dialouge and it could benefit from fleshing out. Like a reviewer of mine said on one of my earlier works, it reads a lot like a play.
| Voidangel Soren chapter 1 . 3/8/2012
Too bad you didn't keep this up.
| RobotOcelot chapter 1 . 9/7/2011
Um, Well It was quite short, and Triana was acting awfully out of character...