What kind of imagery does this evoke?
*I was walking in the chilly September night with my sister and mother. My hands stuffed into my warm coat pockets, and walking swiftly to warm up my legs, we walked towards the Sephora makeup store in Times Square. Times Square was lit up so brightly with the TVs, billboards, lights from theaters, and streetlights that it seemed like it was daylight at nine o’clock at night. Various reds, blues, oranges, and yellows flashed before my eyes as the TVs displayed ads for everything from clothing to coffee, and the round bulbs from theater posters winked off and on. I could feel the energy that coursed through the city’s veins as people, natives and tourists alike, walked in all directions shuffling shopping bags and clicking their shoes as they walked.
Looking up at the giant tall glass concrete buildings, I felt like a tiny ant that the people in them looked down upon. Although Times Square was a cacophony of sounds with all the car horns, conversations, and music coming from inside stores, I was still able to hear my mother and sister clearly tell me to come with them to the brightly lit makeup store from where I was standing, could smell a plethora of different fragrances. The store was filled with women; some dragging their begrudging husbands along as they searched for the perfect shade of eyeshadow or lipstick.*
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